There were to much peoples at the mall so I was
hurried up shopping, I was too hurried that the shirt’s I bought's not big
enough and I'm having to return them.
1. Word
confusion: Don’t confuse “to” a preposition with “too” a modifier.
2. Count/non-count nouns: “people” is a
non-count noun; with a non-count noun use “many” not “much”.
3. Word
form: Because “people” is usually a non-count noun, it does not normally
have a plural form (the plural “peoples” is uncommon).
4. Active vs. passive: The subject of the
verb “hurry” is “I”, so the verb needs to be in the active voice.
5. Word usage: Instead of “too” the word
“so” is needed.
6. Apostrophe usage: Apostrophes indicate
either possession or a missing letter. The word should be “shirts” because the
pronoun “them” refers to them (plural not possessive); also, because this noun
is plural, the plural verb “are” is needed after “bought” .
7. Verb
form: For a statement indicating intention, use the simple present tense
not the present progressive.
8. Punctuation: “So” introduces an independent clause and
follows an independent—use a semicolon. Either use a period or another
semicolon to separate the next 2 clauses. Before the final independent clause
introduced by the coordinating conjunction “and”, use a comma.
Possible Answer: There were too many people at
the mall; so I hurried up shopping. I was so hurried that the shirts I bought
are not big enough, and I have to return them.
