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Because Carlos gave to Mary an disproportionate gift, she had antipathy with him.
Mike's disproportionate ego, often creates feelings of antipathy from people who first meet him.
YADIRINY: This need a little rewording--disproportionate to what? Also note there is a problem with "with";-)PATRICK: You need to make a comparison here--disproportionate to what?
Mary had antipathy towards Carlos because his Valentine's gift to her was disproportionate to what she had given him.
The fact that his head was disproportionate to the body developed her antipathy towards him.
YADIRINY:Much better:-)AYGUL: The vocab is good, but you need to use a different verb or reword the sentence;-)
The fact that his head was disproportionate to the body caused her antipathy towards him.
AYGUL: That's the way!
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Because Carlos gave to Mary an disproportionate gift, she had antipathy with him.
Mike's disproportionate ego, often creates feelings of antipathy from people who first meet him.
YADIRINY: This need a little rewording--disproportionate to what? Also note there is a problem with "with";-)
PATRICK: You need to make a comparison here--disproportionate to what?
Mary had antipathy towards Carlos because his Valentine's gift to her was disproportionate to what she had given him.
The fact that his head was disproportionate to the body developed her antipathy towards him.
YADIRINY:Much better:-)
AYGUL: The vocab is good, but you need to use a different verb or reword the sentence;-)
The fact that his head was disproportionate to the body caused her antipathy towards him.
AYGUL: That's the way!
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